Jellyfish-Station

Jamie stood looking at her counterpart. Lily’s posture was bold and aggressive, flawless. She really was Jamie’s masterpiece. “I’ll ask again, Jamie,” she leaned in with her arms crossed, “…what are you doing?” “He.. he wants me.” “What about Cole?” Lily asked. “Cole?” Jamie laughed a little. “Is that what this is about?” Lily cocked an eyebrow. She was waiting for a better answer. “I mean… Rob Denhart or… Cole Sheldon?” She gestured like she was weighing the names in her hands. “Who cares?” she laughed again. &

This is rewrite of an audio short story I did in 2013. I wanted to add more depth to Jamie as a character and generally make the writing suck less. I welcome any criticisms or comments as I’m an amateur and still in the process of this rewrite. Jamie looked at herself in the mirror. Plain, she thought. Plain Jane. Jamie always considered herself a beautiful woman trapped in the body of a chubby 16 year old. At least that’s what she told herself. She pulled the skin of her face back. Even behind the fat, her features was boring. She sighed. She rifled through the piles of clothes on the floor. It was hard to tell what was what be